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(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates some changes in
population
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growth
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, average
birth
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 per woman and
life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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 in three different categories of
nations
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 by their income level from 2002 to 2004.
Overall
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, low-income
countries
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 had the largest
population
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growth
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as well as
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 average
birth
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in contrast
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 to the highest-income
countries
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 with the smallest
although
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 the former had the shortest
life
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expectancy
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 both in 2002 and 2004. Starting with the lowest income
countries
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, the
population
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growth
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 was the largest with an increase of 2% in 2002 and 1.8% in 2004.
In addition
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, the average
birth
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 was
also
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 the largest at just below 4%
while
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 the number was slightly higher in 2002 than in 2004.
However
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, the
life
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expectancy
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 was the lowest at above 58 in both 2 years. Turning to the graph for high and middle-income
countries
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, their trends are relatively similar since the proportion of the
population
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growth
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 for both
nations
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 was below 1% with the latter being a little higher than the former.
While
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 the number of average births in middle-income
nations
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 was around 2, it was 1.7 for higher-income
nations
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 in 2002 and 2004.
On the other hand
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, higher-income
countries
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 had longer
life
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expectancy
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 with 78 to 78.7
whereas
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 people in middle-class
countries
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 were expected to live until 70 in 2004, with a small increase from 2002.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, birth, life, expectancy, nations, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Population growth rate
  • Average birth per woman
  • Life expectancy at birth
  • Income levels
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Correlations
  • Improvements
  • Declines
  • Statistics
  • Comparisons
  • High-income countries
  • Low-income countries
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