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Band 5.5

You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter: Give details of the camera and where you bought it Explain what has happened Say what you want him/her to do about it

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Hello
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Hello,
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 Sir
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or
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of
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or
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 Madam, I’m writing to inform your company that a part of my luggage has been lost
while
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 I enjoy your airline. I would like to describe my situation. I
traveled
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 from Malta to Istanbul on the 5th of August.
Number
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A number
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 of my plane is TK4001. I have a special luggage. It was a professional
camera
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 Sony ST635. One has been bought in Point
mall
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Mall
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 in Malta. It was in a box with additional
tools
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. When I arrived
to
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 my destination and
open
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opened
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camera
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the camera
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 box I saw that
pieces
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the pieces
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 of
tools
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 were lost. A tripod and a lens weren’t in the box. There is a point in our travel contract about a specification with these
tools
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. I include in my email a scan of a
camera
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 dill and a
tools
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 specification. Correspondingly, I would like to return my
camera
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tools
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 or take
a
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compensation in a size
has
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that has
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 been worth in our contract no later than next week. Because my work will start on the 20th of August and the
camera
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 is a necessity for me. If you need more information you can call me at any time. Faithfully, Nadezhda Eliseeva.

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coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by connecting ideas more clearly. Group related information together to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Pay attention to detail in your explanation. Make sure all relevant information is provided logically and clearly.
task achievement
Your letter addresses the task prompt completely by providing details of the camera, explaining what happened, and stating what you want the representative to do.
coherence cohesion
The closing and greeting of your letter are polite and appropriate for a formal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local representative
  • important items missing
  • purchase details
  • model and brand
  • missing accessories
  • inconvenience
  • use to its full extent
  • urgent request
  • partial refund
  • alternative solution
  • exchange unit
  • correct the issue
  • look forward to your prompt response
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