IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
#quantities #goods #uk #four #modes #transport
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph illustrates
amount
Add an article
the amount
show examples
 of goods which were carried in the United Kingdom using road,
water
Use synonyms
, rail, and
pipeline
Use synonyms
 from 1974 and 2002.
Overall
Linking Words
,
pipeline
Use synonyms
 and road have a slight rise from the start,
while
Linking Words
 rail and
water
Use synonyms
 were constant. Though
water
Use synonyms
 had a slight fall, it ended with an
increase
Use synonyms
, including
Use synonyms
pipeline
Fix the agreement mistake
pipelines
show examples
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
water
Use synonyms
 was highest throughout
while
Linking Words
Use synonyms
pipeline
Add an article
the pipeline
a pipeline
show examples
 was at the bottom throughout as well. All the four means of transport were kind of constant from 1975 and changed towards 1980. On the one hand,
Use synonyms
pipeline
Fix the agreement mistake
pipelines
show examples
 and
water
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
show examples
 just around 1982.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, rail and
water
Use synonyms
 had a slight drop at that time.
Water
Use synonyms
 had a slight
increase
Use synonyms
 up until 1990,
thereafter
Linking Words
, it was constant
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
towards 1995 and
finally
Linking Words
 increased until
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
 2000.
Water
Use synonyms
 began at around 70
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 and ended at almost 100
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 leading throughout.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
Use synonyms
pipeline
Add an article
the pipeline
show examples
 had the lowest
tonnes
Use synonyms
 throughout.
In addition
Linking Words
, it began at around 8
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
, it
further
Linking Words
 had an
increase
Use synonyms
 after 1980 and had about 21 truckloads
tonnes
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, it continued being constant and had a little drop to 20
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 from around 1993 till the end of
ear
Correct your spelling
early
show examples
 2000.
Submitted by pncubeterera on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, pipeline, increase, million, tonnes with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 4 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
What to do next:
Look at other essays: