The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Environmentalism is a major

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for the new generations of youngsters in the twenty-first century. Many argue that the most efficient way of preserving the

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is a surge in

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of fossil fuels and I cannot agree more. I wholeheartedly advocate that

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strategy will lead to lower levels of contamination not only from cars but

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from

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. On the one hand, a policy to spike the price of gas will introduce a critical juncture which has the potential of leading to less dependence on private vehicles.

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, if people figure out that they cannot afford the high cost, they would definitely entertain the idea of utilising

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affordable public transportation.

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, since cars are a major source of contaminating the

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, as greater numbers of citizens get rid of their personal autos, there will be less pollution and air quality will improve tremendously.

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, the fewer fuel-burning and contaminating combustion engines on the roads bring about a brighter prospect for air quality.

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are another overwhelming contributor that

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the

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which will witness an enormous pecuniary hardship in order to afford the increased prices. If

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increase the efficiency of their

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engines, they can actively participate in preserving

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nature. Electricity manufacturing plants release hazardous contaminating pollutants

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the air

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their efficiency rate is below 50% globally,

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. Enhancing the efficiency not only will result in more electricity production but

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will lead to less quantity of released pollutants which are detrimental to humans and living species alike. In conclusion, I unequivocally endorse the adoption of

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policy to increase the price of fossil fuels in order to achieve superior outcomes in preserving the

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and improving the health of nature including humans.

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approach results in

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personal cars being used to commute

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will lead to

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of modern and more efficient equipment by

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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renewable sources
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equity in environmental policies
exacerbating social inequalities
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