The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart demonstrates
sectors
that have become the focus
for
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of
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UK
investment
in clean
energy
between 2008 and 2015. In 2008, there
are
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were
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only 3 clean
energy
sectors
which are invested in the UK
such
as
wind
,
energy
smart technologies and other
sectors
. If we compare these
sectors
, the biggest
investment
was in the
wind
sector, which is approximately about 2
billion
pounds
.
This
similar pattern happened for 3 periods in a row, between 2008 and 2010.
Wind
technologies
investment
experienced a rise in 2009 made them to
near
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nearly
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7
billion
pounds
during
this
year,
on the
contrary
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contrary,
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wind
investment
declined about 1 million
pounds
in 2010 which made them to only 6 million
pounds
. Even though there were fluctuations between 2008 and 2015, clean
energy
investment
escalated in 2015
if
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it
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compared to 2008, they have
risen
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raised
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their
investment
150x
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150
times in 2015,
nonetheless
; the other clean
energy
investment
was approximately the same in these two periods. In 2008 and 2015, other clean
energy
investment
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investments
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totaled about 2
billion
pounds
,
nevertheless
;
wind
investment
jumped to
near
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nearly
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13
billion
pounds
in 2015. In conclusion, UK clean
energy
investment
escalated between 2008 and 2015, the biggest climb happened in
wind
investment
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, investment, energy, wind, billion, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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