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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The presented chart illustrates the
percentage
 of
people
 owning and renting household accommodation in England and Wales in the years 1918 and 2011.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 from 1918 to 2011 the
count
 of
people
 renting decreased and the amount of
people
 owning increased by
this
 time. Notably, in the middle of the period, the
percentage
 of renting and owning
people
 was exactly the same. In accordance with the chart, in 1918 the number of
people
 renting was almost 77% and the
count
 of
people
 owning was about 23%.
Moreover
, in 1961 the
percentage
 of
people
 renting had ceaselessly decreased to approximately 59% and the
count
 of
people
 owning
steady
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 increased to 41% respectively.
Furthermore
, in 1991 the
percentage
 of
people
 renting significantly reduced to 32%, at that time the
count
 of
people
 owning had
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a cosiderable
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cosiderable
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considerable
 growth
to
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 68%.
Also
, in 2011 the
percentage
 changed to 64%
people
 owning and 36%
people
 renting.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, count with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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