The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram compares the floor design of a public library in
20 years ago with Change preposition
apply
in
the present.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, it experienced several changes, ranging from relocation, removal
to construction of new facilities.
Focusing first on the top left side, games using electronic devices Correct word choice
and removal
were
exist Unnecessary verb
apply
while
there are several sofas and some facilities for children. In addition
, on the middle left, adult
fiction Correct article usage
the adult
books
area was relocated to the opposite site
. At present, Correct your spelling
side
computer
room is newly constructed in the bottom left.
Add an article
the computer
It is clear that
tables and chairs were removed during this
period.
Next,
a children’s books
room was converted into a lecture room.
Furthermore
, in the centre right, there are a lot of things now, however
, there was
only adult non-fiction Change the verb form
were
books
in the past. Latsly
, in the bottom right, Correct your spelling
Lastly
a
enquiry desk area, where users could obtain tickets and return Change the article
an
books
, was changed into a spacious cafe.Submitted by rintaro1746 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
▼