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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts data concerning underground railway systems including three categories(date opened,
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of route, and annual passengers) in six big cities(
London
, Paris,
Tokyo
,
Washington
DC
,
Kyoto
, and
Los
Angeles
).
Overall
, it is remarkable that the railway of
London
 opened the earliest,
thus
 it ran the longest
kilomerters
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kilometres
 of route.
Moreover
,
Tokyo
 holds the most number of passengers annually. In terms of
London
, Paris and
Tokyo
, the length of the route was between over 150 and nearly 400, especially
London
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 had the longest distance at 394.
Additionally
, in
Tokyo
, its passengers arrived at approximately 1928 million every year, which was the largest volume of all. With regard to the other three
lately
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recently
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 opened railway cities(
Washington
DC
,
Kyoto
, and
Los
Angeles
),
Washington
DC
's gross
kilometers
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kilometres
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 ranked first at 126,
while
Los
Angeles
 and
Kyoto
 at 28 and 11 respectively. Except the
Washington
DC
 which owned over 100 million persons yearly, both
Kyoto
 and
Los
Angeles
 were around 50 million.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, tokyo, washington, dc, kyoto, los, angeles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railways
  • kilometers of route
  • passenger numbers
  • annually
  • compare and contrast
  • mega-cities
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • extensive network
  • rapid transit
  • capacity
  • commuter volume
  • inauguration date
  • modernization
  • vintage
  • urban development
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