Overpopulation is the world's most serious environmental problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In today's fast-paced
world
, overpopulation is often viewed as a major environmental problem due to
the pressure on natural resources
and contributes to various form
of Fix the agreement mistake
forms
pollution
. I strongly believe that overcrowding impacts our world
adversely.
To begin
with, overpopulation does have a strong impact on the world
's environment for various reasons. Firstly
, an increase in population means that
more Correct word choice
apply
pollution
. In other words
, expand
in population Replace the word
expansion
cause
new houses, facilities and factories, more vehicles on the roads, and more farming. Wrong verb form
caused
Therefore
, these are concluded as a
air, water, soil, and Remove the article
apply
the
noise Correct article usage
apply
pollution
. It is certain that pollution
is a significant issue and it can have serious issues on human and animal health.
On the other hand
, one of the major problem
is Change to a plural noun
problems
decrease
Correct article usage
the decrease
on
natural Change preposition
in
resources
. With the rise of population, requirement
Add an article
the requirement
a requirement
of
water and Change preposition
for
fosil
fuels has become more critical to Correct your spelling
fossil
sustain
daily lives. Change the verb form
sustaining
Moreover
, the modern world
is consuming more than it can produce. People are continuously buy
new clothes, Change the verb form
are continuously buying
technological
devices, and Correct word choice
and technological
construct
new apartments. Wrong verb form
constructing
This
lead
to Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
waste
Wrong verb form
wasting
substantial
amount of natural Add an article
a substantial
resources
. Unfortunately, high usage of resources
brings various detriments in the future such
as global warming, need
Add an article
the need
of
water, and bad air quality.
In conclusion, Change preposition
for
while
overpopulation increase
day by day, it Change the verb form
increases
is
undoubtedly Unnecessary verb
apply
cause
significant issues Replace the word
causes
such
as consuming natural resources
and causes
Wrong verb form
causing
pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
on
Change preposition
to
environment
. Add an article
the environment
Therefore
, overcrowding has adverse effects on our world
and this
is one of the major problem
Change to a plural noun
problems
for
our daily lives.Change preposition
in
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task achievement
To improve your score, ensure that each supporting point is explained clearly and in detail. For instance, provide specific examples of how overpopulation leads to pollution and depletion of natural resources.
grammar
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and try to reduce minor errors, such as subject-verb agreement and word choice. For example, 'expand in population' should be 'expansion of the population.'
lexical resource
Work on expanding your range of vocabulary and using more varied sentence structures. This will make your essay more engaging and demonstrate your language proficiency better.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument effectively.
task achievement
You have addressed the topic well, discussing both pollution and resource depletion as key issues caused by overpopulation.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.