The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
We can see the diagram
show
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that
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how to produce
electricity
by using geothermal.
Overall
, there are 5 main steps in the process of producing
electricity
. beginning with the enterment of the cold
water
and ending
of
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electricity
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the electricity
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appearance. First of all, the cold
water
pumped
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down an underground tube with 4. 5km.
Secondly
, entering the injection well and passing the geothermal zone which is made of hot rocks.
Thirdly
, getting through the production well, the cold
water
changed to the hot
water
than
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then
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pumped up back to the ground.
In addition
, passing the
conderser
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condenser
, the hot
water
becomes
the
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steam.
Finally
, using the generator turbine, powered by the steam changed into powered by turbine
and
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produces
electricity
which
spread
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to the place that people need.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • renewable source
  • sustainable
  • drilling wells
  • hot water and steam
  • drive turbines
  • generate electricity
  • conversion
  • cooling process
  • re-injected
  • efficiency
  • environmental impact
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