The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
We can see the diagram
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
that
how to produce Correct word choice
apply
electricity
by using geothermal.
Use synonyms
Overall
, there are 5 main steps in the process of producing Linking Words
electricity
. beginning with the enterment of the cold Use synonyms
water
and ending Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
with
Use synonyms
electricity
appearance.
First of all, the cold Correct article usage
the electricity
water
Use synonyms
pumped
down an underground tube with 4. 5km. Add a missing verb
is pumped
Secondly
, entering the injection well and passing the geothermal zone which is made of hot rocks. Linking Words
Thirdly
, getting through the production well, the cold Linking Words
water
changed to the hot Use synonyms
water
Use synonyms
than
pumped up back to the ground. Replace the word
then
In addition
, passing the Linking Words
conderser
, the hot Correct your spelling
condenser
water
becomes Use synonyms
the
steam. Change the article
apply
Finally
, using the generator turbine, powered by the steam changed into powered by turbine Linking Words
and
produces Correct word choice
apply
electricity
which Use synonyms
spread
to the place that people need.Wrong verb form
spreads
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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