In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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Some people in education and employment
work
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harder than others.They believe that it is the fastest way to be more successful than their opponents ,
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, not keeping the
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between
rest
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and
work
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may hurt anyone. It is obvious that almost everyone believes that working hard is the only way to success.In
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case,it follows the simple rule, if you
work
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more than others ,as a rule, you will get more than others.Surely,everyone heard that back when they were little child, from parents and especially from our school teachers,so
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mindset stuck in our brains since childhood.
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, in order to get good grades in school, many children,especially in conservative Asia countries ,spend their time mostly
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studying
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of resting and living their best
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they are young.
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, it is good to study or
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hard as long as it hurts you and damages your mental health.Many students and employees in the world
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out and get stressed because of not keeping the
balance
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between
rest
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and whether it is
work
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or studying.
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,when
i
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was young,
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spent 8 hours
striaght
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straight
untile
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until
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midnight preparing for the exam and,
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, I got a lower score than my classmates,which was really
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surprising
because I believed that I studied more than them.
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situation made me realize that even if you are working hard,
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without
balance
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between it and
rest
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,it will eventually affect you negatively. In conclusion, I want to say that working hard for educational or
work
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purposes is good as long as you keep a
balance
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between
rest
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and
work
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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