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There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

#noise #places #cities
The level of
noise
 has become an ongoing
issue
 in today's era.
Noise
 is increasing day by day in many public
places
 in cities. The main cause is traffic and
loud speakers
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loudspeakers
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 in
the
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apply
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public
places
. There are some measures which can be taken to eradicate
this
on going
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ongoing
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issue
. First and foremost, the key reason
of
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for
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noise
 is traffic.
People
 use their
vechicle
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vehicle
vehicles
 in public
places
 which
create
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creates
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high
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a high
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 level of
noise
 by honking or by the engine. Folk do not
perfer
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prefer
 to share their ride with others and lack of
car-pooling
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carpooling
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 a person likes to buy their own
vechicle
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vehicle
.
For instance
, private
ride
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rides
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is
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are
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 more accessible and convenient as compared to public
ride
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rides
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that's
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that is
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 why a person
avoid
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avoids
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 using other means of transportation. Another reason is
loud speakers
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loudspeakers
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 which are played by many
youngers
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younger
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 in public in terms of entertainment.
People
 consider public
places
are
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to be
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 free and no one can stop them
to play
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from playing
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 loud music.
This
 thesis creates excessive
noise
. There are plenty of solutions to eliminate
this
issue
.
Firstly
,
people
 can be
encourged
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encouraged
 to use public transport which not only benefits
to
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from
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 traffic and
noise
 but
also
 makes
environment
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the environment
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clean
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cleaner
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 and greener. Another measure is car-pooling,
this
aslo
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also
 can help to cut down cars on the
raod
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road
 and helps to decrease
noise
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the noise
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 level.
Last
 but not least, there should be
law
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a law
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 for playing loud music in public areas, like
people
 can put
headset
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headsets
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 on or
either
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apply
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they can turn
volume
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the volume
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 down to dismiss the
noise
.
To conclude
, no doubt there are major reasons
of
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 high
noise
 in public
places
 but, some possible solutions can be taken to tackle
with
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apply
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this
issue
.
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task achievement
Try to include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific events or statistics related to noise pollution caused by traffic or loudspeakers.
task achievement
Work on grammatical accuracy and spelling – there are several small errors (e.g., 'vechicle' instead of 'vehicle').
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that the transition from one idea to the next is smooth and logical. This will enhance coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and suggests potential solutions to the problem of noise in public places.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly present, making the structure easy to follow.
task achievement
The main reasons for noise pollution are addressed, and several solutions are proposed, showing a thorough understanding of the issue.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • traffic congestion
  • infrastructure development
  • public announcement systems
  • street performances
  • noise regulations
  • soundproof materials
  • public transportation
  • designated quiet zones
  • green spaces
  • buffer zones
  • public awareness
  • community efforts
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