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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates information about
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systems
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the systems
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 of
subway
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the subway
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 in six countries including
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 date they opened, the length of routes and the annual
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 of
passengers
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.
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, London, Paris and Tokyo whose subways travel relatively longer distances have more
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 Kyoto has the smallest
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 of travellers. Starting with underground
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passengers
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, a subway in Tokyo, which opened in 1927,
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 the largest
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 1928, followed by Paris with 1191. Their routes opened in 1927 and 1900 and extend 155km and 199km, respectively.
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 subway in London has
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fewer
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 with 775, it is both the oldest and longest system of all. Turning to the
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fewer travellers, the
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 of those who use underground service with 126km route in Washinton DC declines to 144. The
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 in Kyoto and Los Angeles are the latest as they opened in 1981 and 2001, respectively.
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 of customers is 50 or less with the latter being slightly higher
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 the route of the former is only 11km
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 to 28km for the latter.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words systems, number, passengers, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railways
  • kilometers of route
  • passenger numbers
  • annually
  • compare and contrast
  • mega-cities
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • extensive network
  • rapid transit
  • capacity
  • commuter volume
  • inauguration date
  • modernization
  • vintage
  • urban development
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