The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph displays the
number
of
students
enrolled at Manchester University in the years 1937,1967, 2017.
Overall
, the
number
of enrollments
tend
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tends
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to increase year after year. The
percentage
of female
and
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students
overseas
increase
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has increased
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abruptly in the
last
year. The enrollment of men dramatically dropped
the
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in the
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last
50 years. In 1937, the
number
of
students
started with 327 enrollments, from there to 2017 the
number
of
students
significantly increased to have in 2017 6254
students
. The
percentage
of women initiated in 1937 with 45% dropped
10
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to 10
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% in 1967 and went up
in
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to
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20 % in 2017 with 55% of enrollments. The proportion of
students
overseas was 6% in 1937 and increased the
percentage
due to
the
enroll
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enrollment
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of
students
from 102 different countries reaching 32 %. The proportion of men
students
was in 1937 55%, the
percentage
grew 10% in 1967 and dramatically dropped to 45% in 2017. The same happened with
students
living nearly 40 miles
of
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from
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Manchester, started
at
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in
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1937
with
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at
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55%
however
, throughout the years significantly got down to just below 2% in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • increase/decrease in student numbers
  • post-war baby boom
  • globalization
  • technological advancement
  • education accessibility
  • demographic changes
  • overseas students
  • gender representation in education
  • international reputation
  • higher education
  • university capacity
  • social factors
  • economic influences
  • political factors
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