It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Punishment for
children
is often a very good or very bad way to discipline them, depending on the punishment. I agree very much on punishments, but the methods must be improved.
Parents
of children
differ wildly depending on how they were raised by their own parents
, like the common stereotype of Asian parents
as the harshest with the most successful children
with the final goal being money. The punishments given out at the best being degraded verbally, and at the worst are borderline child
abuse in beatings or being cut out from basic necessities.
Teachers
on the other hand
can also
differ immensely, because some people are just not meant to be teachers
, despite having degrees in education. Some teachers
would humiliate students
who've
done nothing wrong for their own benefit of degrading another human, and other teachers
would even relate to their students
, going so far as to chat of
a popular subject with the Change preposition
about
children
and give opinions that can be discussed.
Parents
and teachers
should be understanding
that despite wrongdoings Wrong verb form
understand
must
be held accounted for by the doer, the culprits are still young Correct pronoun usage
that must
children
, and not think of them as bad or stupid. Teachers
are the students
' second parent during their education years, and a good teacher can shape good morals as well as
parents
can.
Such
scenarios could be, say for
example, taking a toy from another young Add the comma(s)
, for
child
due to
being impatient and wanting a turn. A teacher who witnesses this
could make the child
apologize without humiliation and teaches
the Correct subject-verb agreement
teach
child
that patience is a virtue,
and that they will always be able Remove the comma
apply
have
a turn. The consequences could be that the Add the particle
to have
child
learns that they could even share the toy and make friends with the children
instead
of being selfish.
I've
personally felt the differences between teachers
, with some having more patience than others. In middle school I've
had some teachers
who were extremely strict, going so far as to kicking
the student out for forgetting to bring a textbook. It ingrains fear into younger Change the form of the verb
kick
students
, and yes, it does help them to remember to bring something, but also
increases the paranoia of forgetting to do an assignment or bring a book. Some teachers
even yelled, and it's become a good factor of why I've
been scared to ask or to
even interact with Verb problem
apply
teachers
as I grew up.
Children
are often mirrors of their parents
, if their parents
act a certain way or witnesses
their Correct subject-verb agreement
witness
parent
do a certain thing Fix the agreement mistake
parents
due to
some factors, they will most likely copy it in the same scenario. Say a child
witnesses a moment of racism between a parent or parents
and a stranger they randomly met. It leads to the moulding of a child
's perception of right and wrong,
because at a young age, they see things in a very blunt light. Monkey see, Remove the comma
apply
moneky
do, as the saying says.Correct your spelling
monkey
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