It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Punishment for
children
is often a very good or very bad way to discipline them, depending on the punishment. I agree very much on punishments, but the methods must be improved.
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abuse in beatings or being cut out from basic necessities.
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