The bar chart below shows the percentages of three groups of Japanese children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentages of three groups of Japanese children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The presented bar diagram provides information about the percentages of
the
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youngsters
lived
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in Japan that
was
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devided
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divided
into three categories engaging in four types of activities in 2018. From an
overall
persperctive
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perspective
,
it is clear that
the majority of children in Japan choose to play
Computer
Games
among others and the least wanted task was Reading. Examining the details, in Malaysia, there was exactly a half
percent
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of
the
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adolescents
who
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prefer to spend their activities in
Computer
Games
. Watching TV placed as the second highest proportion, with 30
percent
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of children.
Moreover
, Board
Games
and Reading followed closely behind with a quarter and 20
percent
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per cent
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, respectively. The same condition
was
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happened in China,
although
the number of
Computer
Games
had
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a
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lower number in 10
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compared to Malaysia.
In addition
, the most interesting point was Nigeria, which had 60
percents
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percent
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of young people who chose
playing
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to play
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Computer
Games
, with only half of
that
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them
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enjoy
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enjoying
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to Watch
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watching
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TV (30%).
Moreover
, only 20
percent
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like to play Board
Games
and 10
percent
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vote for Reading.
Furthermore
,
although
Computer
Games
reached a half proportion in Sudan, the number of Board
Games
and Watching TV had the same
conditons
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conditions
, being 30% of the total. Reading stayed constant as the least common activity, with only 10
percent
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of
young
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the young
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population
like
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it.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, games, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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