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The map shows the village park, now and 10 years ago. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the village park, now and 10 years ago. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps show the development of the village
park
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, now and 10 years ago. It can be seen from the maps that the village
park
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 has been modified,
which
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and
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 some facilities are enlarged or narrowed down.
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, 10 years ago, on the right side of the entrance, there were two tennis
court
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courts
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. On the left side, there was a car
park
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 which held a maximum of 20 cars.
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, a football field was located in the centre of the village
park
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. There was a
children
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children's
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 play
area
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 to the east of the tennis court.
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, to the southeast of the football pitch, there was a pond surrounded by woods on the right side. Ten years later, most of the facilities remained in the same direction.
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, the number of tennis
court
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courts
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 increased to four and the maximum number of cars in the
carpark
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car park
raised
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rose
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 to fifty. A picnic
area
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 was added to the southwest of the football pitch.
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, a
children
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children's
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 soft play
area
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 was established to the south of the
children
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children's
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 play
area
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 with a toilet located next to it.
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, the woods were transformed into a café.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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