The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
The presented pie charts compare the number of
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expenditure
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in a particular European country
devided
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divided
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by six different goods and services between 1958 and 2008. From an
overall
perspective, it can be seen that there were
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different trends during both intervening years.
While
the most selling products in 1958
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for food, in 2008 it has changed to
housing
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area. Examining the first diagram, the most spending sector accounted for food at more than 30 per
cent
, making it the biggest segment among others.
Additionally
, housing
recorded
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as the second largest data, being 22% of the total. Following closely, exactly 18
percent
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of
money
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used
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for clothing and there was 5 per
cent
lower for
the
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entertainment (13%).
Moreover
, in 1958, less than 10 per
cent
of sales
represent
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for travel and luxury goods. Moving on to the sales in 2008, over 30% spent
in
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housing in the next
half century
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. Both transportation and expensive things have the same level at 17% and continued by
clothing
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the clothing
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sector
about
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16%.
Although
in the previous
years
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food became the most popular sector, it has dropped to only 12%
from
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the total.
Lastly
, entertainment witnessed the least number,
accouting
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accounting
for only 6 per
cent
from
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the total.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • commodities
  • services
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • trends
  • significant changes
  • expenditure
  • housing and utilities
  • summarize
  • highlight
  • primary trends
  • fifty-year period
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • analyze
  • observe
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