The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for

different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting

and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented line graph illustrates the amount of worldwide guests visiting
to
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the
UK
for various aims from 1989 and 2009. From an
overall
perspective, it can be seen that
although
there was a fluctuation
trend
, holiday was the most common reason to go to the
UK
throughout the intervening
years
. Examining the details, starting with more than 6
millions
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of
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people who visit the
UK
, the
trend
was
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rose significantly to exactly 9
millions
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around the next 7
years
.
However
, it
began
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sharply dropped to less than its initial position in 2004 and continued climbing to
the
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9
millions
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in 2009, making it the biggest proportion among others.
Additionally
, business was recorded as the second highest
purposes
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to
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the
UK
. In the first year, it has 5
millions
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and
then
decline
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to four
millions
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in the next two
years
. Moving on to the other reasons, the number of population that
come
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to the
UK
in the first year
were
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5
millions
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. Despite it
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dropped to 4
millions
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, there
were
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an upward
trend
to exactly 8
millions
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in the next ten
years
.
Nonetheless
, the year 2009 witnessed a
fell
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number
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, being 7
millions
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of the total.
Additionally
, in 1989, around 3,5
millions
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of
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people who chose
UK
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the UK
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for their
destitation
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destination
was
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for meeting their
surrounding
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.
Furthermore
, the
trend
has
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slightly increased to 7
millions
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in 2009 and dropped a million to 6 by the end of the period. It is becoming the least preferable
reasons
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to visit the territory of the
UK
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, trend, years, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • statistics
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak periods
  • holidaymakers
  • business trips
  • educational tourism
  • significant increase/decrease
  • data interpretation
  • exponential growth
  • steady decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cultural events
  • tourist influx
  • graph analysis
  • quantitative change
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