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The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The presented table explains data about the number of scholars who
join
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the
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apply
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secondary
school
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schools
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 from 2000 to 2009. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that community
schools
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 witnessed an upward trend,
while
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 the least preferable was for the specialist
schools
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 from the intervening years. Examining the details, in the first year listed on the graph,
volunatry-controlled
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voluntary-controlled
schools
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 ranked as the most wanted learning place with more than half proportions.
However
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, in the next 9 years, it has a slightly decreased to a fifth (20%).
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, the downward changes
also
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 happened in grammar
schools
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 that started with nearly a quarter in the first year to less than 15 per
cent
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 in the
last
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.
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, the most significant point was community
schools
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 that only 12 per
cent
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 of children who chose it in the initial year. Interestingly, it recorded a
sharply
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 growth to 58 per
cent
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 in 2009, making it
as
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apply
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the most popular among others.
Furthermore
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, throughout the years, specialist
schools
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remain
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remained
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 unchanged as the unpopular
schools
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that
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apply
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experienced
fall
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a fall
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 in a per
cent
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 number for each period.
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