Task 1; The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
The given two bar graphs illustrate information about what the graduate and
postgraduate’s
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postgraduate
students
did after finishing their studies in university if they didn’t find a full-time work
, in the year Remove the article
full-time work
a full-time job
of
2008.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, what stands out from the graphs is that,
there were a Remove the comma
apply
significant
larger number of graduate Change the adjective
significantly
students
than postgraduate’s
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postgraduate
students
, while
they had a similar distribution in these four options. Another interesting point is that more students
would probably prefer to get higher degrees, while
only a few graduates would work for charity.
For the first graph, we can find that more students
chose to get a further
study, with a number of 29665. There was a similar situation between part-time work and unemployment, with 17735 and 16235 respectively. However
, there were only 3500 students
who went to do charity work, and it was almost one tenth
of the figure Add a hyphen
one-tenth
of
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for
further
study.
There was similarity
between these two graphs, the biggest and smallest figures Add an article
the similarity
a similarity
were
with the same aspect, but had different Verb problem
had
relationship
between the top two figures. There was a large gap Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
them
for the first graph, Change preposition
between them
however
, when it comes to the second chart, most students
preferred to get a higher degree, closely followed by those who wanted to get a part-time job, both of them were just above 2500. There was also
a group of graduates who could not find a job, with 1625, which was 5 times as many as that in voluntary worksSubmitted by 2575444164 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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