The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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The given two bar graphs illustrate information about what the graduate and

postgraduate’s

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postgraduate

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students

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did after finishing their studies in university if they didn’t find

a full-time work

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full-time work

a full-time job

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, in the year

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apply

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2008.

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, what stands out from the graphs is that

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there were a

significant

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larger number of graduate

students

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than

postgraduate’s

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postgraduate

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students

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while

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they had a similar distribution in these four options. Another interesting point is that more

students

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would probably prefer to get higher degrees,

while

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only a few graduates would work for charity. For the first graph, we can find that more

students

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chose to get a

further

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study, with a number of 29665. There was a similar situation between part-time work and unemployment, with 17735 and 16235 respectively.

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, there were only 3500

students

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who went to do charity work, and it was almost

one tenth

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one-tenth

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of the figure

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for

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further

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study. There was

similarity

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the similarity

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between these two graphs, the biggest and smallest figures

were

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had

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with the same aspect, but had different

relationship

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relationships

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between the top two figures. There was a large gap

them

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between them

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for the first graph,

however

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, when it comes to the second chart, most

students

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preferred to get a higher degree, closely followed by those who wanted to get a part-time job, both of them were just above 2500. There was

also

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a group of graduates who could not find a job, with 1625, which was 5 times as many as that in voluntary works

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, however, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

243 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Graduate
Postgraduate
Full-time work
Further education
Part-time work
Unemployment
Volunteering
Traveling
Gap year
Career progression
Job market
Transition
Academic life
Professional sphere
Economic factors
Social factors
Financial crisis
Long-term impact

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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

some people think that success in life comes form hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

Some think they can use as much fresh water as they want, but others say governments should limit water use because it is not endless. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say children no longer need to develop handwriting skills. Others believe that handwriting is still important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.