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The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
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The graph depicts the process of biofuel production which is called
Ethanol
. It is a circle consisting of ten steps from
initial
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the initial
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 trees to
final
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the final
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Ethanol
.
Moreover
, the final
ethanol
 will join the circle next time. In the first stage, carbon dioxide flows to forests and compares with sunlight, both being absorbed by plants and trees in order to grow vividly. Once mature, the woods are harvested and transported to pre-process where trunks and leaves are smashed in order to own Cellulose for the following process. The extracted Cellulose is conveyed to laboratories for
further
 processing. Once the Cellulose is tackled, the resulting sugars are observed.
Following
this
, microbes are added to sugars before going to the final step.
Subsequently
, the treated sugars are produced into
Ethanol
. In the
last
 step,
Ethanol
 takes part in
transportation
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the transportation
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 industry, using
as
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it as
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 biofuel in airplanes,
trucks
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and trucks
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 which emit carbon dioxide and repeat the circle again.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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