Task 1; The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Task 1; The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The given two bar graphs illustrate information about what the graduate and postgraduate
students
did after finishing their studies in university if they didn’t find a full-time job, in the year 2008.
Overall
, what stands out from the graphs is that
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there were a significantly larger number of graduate
students
than postgraduate
students
,
while
they had a similar distribution in these four options. Another interesting point is that more
students
would probably prefer to get higher degrees,
while
only a few graduates would work for charity. For the first graph, we can find that more
students
chose to get a
further
study, with a number of 29665. There was a similar situation between part-time work and unemployment, with 17735 and 16235 respectively.
However
, there were only 3500
students
who went to do charity work, and it was almost one-tenth of the figure for
further
study. There was a similarity between these two graphs, the biggest and smallest figures had the same aspect, but had different relationships between the top two figures. There was a large gap between them for the first graph,
however
, when it comes to the second chart, most
students
preferred to get a higher degree, closely followed by those who wanted to get a part-time job, both of them were just above 2500. There was
also
a group of graduates who could not find a job, with 1625, which was 5 times as many as that in voluntary works
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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