The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London between 2003 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London between 2003 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph reveals the
number
of armed
robbery
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robberies
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,
assault
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assaults
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and
murder
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murders
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commited
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committed
in London from 2003 to 2012.
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, weaponized plumbers
occured
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occurred
the most at the start of
period
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out of 3
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offences
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, but
then
its count dramatically dropped. Attacks ,
however
,increased over time and
number
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of numbers remained essentially unchanged. In 2003 ,the
number
of armed burglaries accounted for just under 3500, which
then
reached the graph’s peak at approximately 3700
year
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later, steadily declining to
slighly
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slightly
over 1000 instances in 2008 and
increased
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to 1500 , where it remained unchanged for the rest of the period. Turning to strikes, the total
number
of attacks recorded in 2003 was 2300 , which ranged under 2500 until 2010 , by 2012
similiar
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similar
cases became more frequent and hit its highest of 2800 assaults. The
number
for
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homicides
were
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the same
in
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the beginning and end of the graph despite minor
variation
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. The largest amount of people (900) were killed in 2005,which
then
fell to around 600 and hovered until 2012, with a minor climb of 700 in 2010.
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