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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The provided table and pie charts provide data about the police
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budget
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 between 2017 and 2018.
While
 the table illustrates how the money was spent, the chart shows its distribution. From an
overall
 perspective, it can be seen that
most
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 expenditure sources
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 the national government that
being
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 used for the salaries of its employees,
while
 the least amount of allocation was spent for other sources (
such
 as grants) and the lowest usage was for technology. Examining the first table, in 2017, there were more than 175m
poundsterling
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pound sterling
 used for the country's legislators and it has increased
at
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 2.3m in the next year, making it the highest
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budget
 among others. The second biggest proportion was local taxes
that
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 had around 91m in 2017 to 102.3m a year later. Other sources ranked as the smallest number, started with 38m in the first year and only had a million growth by the end of the listed years. Moving on to the next chart, the majority of the money orientation in both years was for the salary of the officers and staff, being more than a half per cent of the total. The purpose for buildings and transport witnessed on the same level at 17%.
However
, there was a sharp growth in
technology
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 sector,
that
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 was almost two-fold from 8 to 14 per cent
from
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 the intervening years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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