The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the average
usage
on
weekly
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a weekly
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basis per individual of two social media platforms,
Facebook
and
Twitter
in Australia from 2012-2016.
Overall
, the average
usage
of
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per person using
Facebook
rose for
few
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a few
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years,
on the other hand
, the average time of individuals using
Twitter
significantly declined for
few
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a few
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years but eventually a massive rise was marked in 2016. In the initial year of 2012, both online platforms were being used
for
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around 20-23
times
a
week
by a single person,
however
in 2013, the
usage
of
Twitter
was recorded around 11
times
a
week
, and by the start of year
2014
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2014,
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the trend touched to 10
times
a
week
. A minimal rise of approx 14
times
a
week
was accounted
in
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2015, which was still low in comparison to the time
of
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per individual in terms of using
of
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Facebook
.
Although
, the other platform,
Facebook
, saw a steady increase in
per person
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usage
by 5
times
a year, till 2014. From 2014 to 2015 the time
being
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spent on
Facebook
was slightly changed from 30 to 31
times
by the end of 2015. Despite
this
steady growth,
Twitter
marked a rapid growth, with users spending 35
times
a
week
in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, facebook, twitter, times, week with synonyms.
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