School is a place where people create memories. Do you think that school-related memories have an influence on future success or happiness? Why or why not? Use specific examples from your experience to support your view.

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from
my perspective,Schools are only the place where the students have best childhood memories.
For example
, I have found many true
friends
in my school, these
friends
are still helping me for future achievements.
Refering
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Referring
to the second question,
Schools
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memories influence
the
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apply
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happiness or
some time
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sometimes
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success.Just my
friends
are from different majors but
we
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when we sit we learn from each other many new things.
Secondly
, Having good
friends
is
also
the
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blessing and school is the place where
the
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friendship
are
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real ,they are not for money or
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the benefits
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benefits
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of
individual
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the individual
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.
Good
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friends
circle is the way to success and
also
the
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happiness.
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my
friends
also
last
year
arrange
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the
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surprize
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surprise
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birthday for me.
This
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little steps make the person more happy.
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Your essay addresses the topic and presents a viewpoint on whether school-related memories influence future success or happiness.

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