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With an increasing population communicating via the Internet and text-messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#population #internet #communication
In today's contemporary world, there is a significant inclination of individuals towards excessive usage of
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internet and text messages for communication
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face to
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face
 communication. These social networking
chat
platforms
 are highly addictive ,especially
our
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since our
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 younger generation is stuck with it
everyday
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. Undoubtedly,
this
 phenomenon is on the rise adversely affecting our society's way of socializing,
this
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 and cons
along with
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opinions
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 with
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 instances and suggest some ways
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how to control
this
.
However
, the situation is
aggrevated
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aggravated
due to
widespread
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the widespread
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 use of online
chat
 services and numerous
platforms
 to check in about their social life , these vicious things have become a common
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modern
 lifestyle practice and
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 considered
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a vital status symbol.
Instead
 of organising social community gatherings, people are more towards forming
chat
 groups and connecting globally from their
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.
In addition
 to that, social anxiety has become an issue of grave concern amongst the younger generations , they are so comfortably and conveniently using their mobiles to communicate they can no longer handle socializing in person creating a pressurized and panic situation for them.
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recent surveys clearly depict that
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 of
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the popilation
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popilation
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population
 is more interested in online
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instead
 of
face to
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face
 communication.
Nonetheless
, certain preventive measures are suggested to counter the escalation of the pandemic.
To begin
 with, for
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teenagers,
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 parents should enforce some ground rules
and
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proactively monitor their social
platforms
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 usage and impart knowledge and
importance
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the importance
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 of physical interaction.
Moreover
 , community groups and activities should be
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 more frequently to attract more participants and explain the harmful side
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effects
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 of
chat
-room addiction.
Nevertheless
, I strongly believe
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the government
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 should work alongside these companies to impose some kind of limitation on
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usage
 for minors to prevent addictions and various other recurring issues. In summation,
according to
 my perspective, the phenomenon vindicated above needs to be resolved by using some preventive measures. I completely agree with the notion that, these days society prefers to
potray
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portray
 themselves on
chat
 groups and
internet
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the internet
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 causing next to no physical contact and reducing
value
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the value
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 of relations. We as a society need to
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this
preicament
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predicament
 , with minute mindfulness and
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a balanced
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 approach in using these
platforms
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task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt but lacks a clear thesis statement that outlines the writer's stance on the topic. Make it clear in the introduction whether you agree or disagree with the statement and to what extent. Revise the introduction to reflect a clear standpoint.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs follow a logical order and that there's a smooth transition between points. This can be improved by using more transition words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
Some ideas are repetitive and lack depth. Delve into each point with more detail and provide more variety in arguments. This will help to make your essay more persuasive and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the points discussed in the essay and reinforces your perspective on the issue.
task achievement
You do provide real-life examples and some general insights to support your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face communication
  • digital means
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • facial expressions
  • context and emotions
  • online communication
  • misunderstandings
  • immediate feedback
  • social connection
  • virtual reality
  • human element
  • confidentiality
  • augment
  • deeper personal connections
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