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Some people believe that teaching children at home is the best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. gpt

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There is no denying the fact that some people believe that studying at home is more beneficial and effective for children
while
 it is
commonly
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 held belief that going to
school
 is critical in
this
 essay I will demonstrate both sides and I will express my opinion.
To begin
 some people say that studying at home is more convenient
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words
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 we can say that
,
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 studying at home provides time and effort parents will not spend money
for
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 transportation and it saves time going to
school
 and back
secondly
, it is more effective to be more clear, the child will concentrate more
with
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 the teacher because he will not be distracted by other students
thirdly
, online classes
is
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 more flexible
for example
, in corona pandemic it saved the educational process and it can be used in rainy days or extremely warm days.
On the other hand
 some people say that going to
school
 is better because the child will have more friends and he can build his
communicational
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relationship
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 and skills
secondly
 going to
school
 is more productive
in other words
 we can say that the teacher can see the students face to face which leads to better results
thirdly
 it can be healthier to be clear in
school
 there are a lot of activities
such
 as football which can improve the child’s performance and health and there a lot of mathematic competitions which can help the student to develop thinking skills In conclusion,
i
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 believe that there is no right opinion but in my point of view going to
school
 is more effective and productive and it can help to learn in a better way but there is no issue
to have
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 some online classes
in
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 rainy days .
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Conclude by summarizing the main points discussed and restating your opinion clearly. This helps to tie everything together and provide closure to your essay.
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The essay presents both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the topic.
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A personal opinion is clearly stated in the conclusion, providing a clear stance on the issue.
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The introduction and conclusion are present, framing the discussion well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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