Write a letter to your friend who just moved to a new house letting him know about a gift you prepared for him/her a)What was the gift b)Why you chose it c)How it will be delivered

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Dear John,

Congratulation

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on your closing of the

brand new

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house. I was over the cloud when you sent me a message on social media. Myself and my wife thought to gift you a nice television for the living area.

Although

, we had other options

but

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apply

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end

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ended

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up on

this

wonderful

which has 55

inch

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55-inch

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apply

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screen and

new

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a new

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model of Toshiba.

Last

week I was talking with your wife and she mentioned

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to me

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that you are looking for

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a TV

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for the house.

With

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Without

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out second thought, I went to the mall

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apply

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in the evening and found that there

are

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were

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multiple

sale

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sales

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going on

Hence

, It is ideal for me to go with

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the TV

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option.

Unfortunetly

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Unfortunately

, I

couldn't

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wasn't

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able to deliver it by myself as I have

small

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a small

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car and it cannot fix in it.

However

, I had a talk with

store

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the store

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manager and he said they will deliver by

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a third

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third party

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courier company within 3 working days. I have given them your new home address and cell number. See you later! Your buddy, Harsh.

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task achievement

Try to work on correcting minor grammatical errors and improving sentence structures for better clarity. For example, instead of 'Although, we had other options but we end up on this wonderful TV', you could say 'Although we had other options, we decided on this wonderful TV.'

coherence cohesion

The letter could benefit from a stronger connection between paragraphs. For example, use more transition words or phrases to guide the reader through the text seamlessly.

suitable writing tone

The letter maintains a friendly and personal tone throughout, which is well-suited for writing to a friend.

single idea per paragraph

Each paragraph covers a single idea, which helps in maintaining clarity and coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

179 words

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Write a letter to your friend who just moved to a new house letting him know about a gift you prepared for him/her a)What was the gift b)Why you chose it c)How it will be delivered

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

An organisation has given an advertisement for part time volunteering job for local children. Write a letter to the administrator of the organisation in your letter introduce yourself Why you think you are suitable for this. Job State when you will be able to join

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.