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Your Local Public Library wants to make improvement to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in witing, write a letter to the librarian in your letter. discribe what you like about the library. say what you don't like - make suggestion for improvement.

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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/madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well, I am writing
this
 letter to provide my suggestion to make
improvement
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improvements
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in
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to
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services
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the services
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 and facilities provided to local people. I reside near by street, I visit
library
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the library
a library
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 regularly to
redbooks
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read books
as well as
news
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the
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 paper to get updates with
latest
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the latest
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 news. The best thing I like about the
library
 is each
book-selves
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book
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are
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is
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 organized very well, It makes reader to
findbooks
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books
 of their interest quickly.
Also
, In
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the library
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library
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library,
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 there are many people
cominng
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coming
 still there is pin-drop silence maintained which helps
reader
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the reader
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 to focus well on reading.
However
, I would like to offer
humble
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the humble
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 suggestion that
local
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the local
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 public
library
 should extend their area where specifically
kids
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kids'
kid's
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 books and other
aminities
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amenities
 are available to
childrens
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children
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 where they can discuss openly with their friends and parents.
Thanking
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Thank
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 you for your consideration. Yours faithfully Vani
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task achievement
Your letter provides good suggestions, but try to elaborate more on what you don't like about the library. This will make your response more complete.
coherence cohesion
Break your ideas into clearer paragraphs. Each paragraph should develop a single main idea to improve readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling for a more polished letter. For example, 'aminities' should be 'amenities' and 'childrens' should be 'children.'
task achievement
Your tone is appropriate and polite, which is suitable for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
You have a strong greeting and closing, which adds to the professional nature of your letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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