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the charts below show that UK graduate and postgraduate studrents who did not go into full-time work did after leaving collage in 2008 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show that UK graduate and postgraduate studrents who did not go into full-time work did after leaving collage in 2008 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs give
informatoin
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information
 about how trend
to
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of
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 busy graduate and postgraduate
students
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,
exception
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except
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full-time
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those full-time
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work
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, in
UK
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the UK
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 during 2008.
Overall
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, it is evident that there
are
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 the least level of
particepating
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participating
participation
 to voluntary
work
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,
however
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, the most amount of
students
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 go
ahaed
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ahead
 in their study for both
group
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groups
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. Looking at the charts in more detail, we can see that the
number
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 of
further
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study
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studies
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 for graduate
students
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 stood just low 30000 which is
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this
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a
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 level is
more
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apply
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about 10 times
than
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apply
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the quantity of
the
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apply
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valunter
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volunteer
work
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. The status of
the
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apply
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part-time
work
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 and the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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unemployment
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unemployed
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students
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 is
roughtly
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roughly
 equal, just above 15000 among graduate
students
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. Regarding postgraduate
students
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, there are about the same
number
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 in the
choise
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choice
 of part-time
work
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 and
further
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 study just more than 2500. The level of
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volunteer
volunter
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volunteer
work
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 is the
least
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lowest
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, which is less
about
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than
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 5 times
from
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apply
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the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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unemployment

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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