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the charts below show that UK graduate and postgraduate studrents who did not go into full-time work did after leaving collage in 2008 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show that UK graduate and postgraduate studrents who did not go into full-time work did after leaving collage in 2008 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs give
informatoin
Correct your spelling
information

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about how trend
to
Change preposition
of

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 busy graduate and postgraduate
students
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

,
exception
Replace the word
except

The word exception doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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full-time
Correct determiner usage
those full-time

It seems that determiner use may be incorrect here.

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work
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK

Your article usage with the geographic name UK may be incorrect.

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 during 2008.
Overall
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, it is evident that there
are
Change the verb form
is

The plural form of be are does not seem to agree with the singular subject the least level. Consider changing the verb form.

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 the least level of
particepating
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participating
participation

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to voluntary
work
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,
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the most amount of
students
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 go
ahaed
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ahead

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in their study for both
group
Fix the agreement mistake
groups

It seems that group may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. Looking at the charts in more detail, we can see that the
number
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 of
further
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
study
Fix the agreement mistake
studies

It seems that study may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 for graduate
students
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 stood just low 30000 which is
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this
Correct determiner usage
a

It seems that determiner use may be incorrect here.

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 level is
more
Correct quantifier usage
apply

It seems that quantifier use may be incorrect here.

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about 10 times
than
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the quantity of
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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valunter
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volunteer

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work
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. The status of
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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part-time
work
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 and the
number
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 of
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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unemployment
Replace the word
unemployed

The word unemployment doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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students
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 is
roughtly
Correct your spelling
roughly

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equal, just above 15000 among graduate
students
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. Regarding postgraduate
students
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, there are about the same
number
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 in the
choise
Correct your spelling
choice

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of part-time
work
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 and
further
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 study just more than 2500. The level of
Correct your spelling
volunteer
volunter
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volunteer

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work
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 is the
least
Correct word choice
lowest

There may be an adjective issue here.

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, which is less
about
Change preposition
than

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 5 times
from
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the
number
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 of
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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unemployment

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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