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You recently received an invitation to a dinner party at your friend’s house. Write a letter to accept the invitation. In your letter: explain why you are accepting the invitation describe why you are looking forward to the dinner party offer to bring a dish to share

#invitation #dinner #party #friend’s #house #offer #dish
Hi Selina, How is your family?
I’m
 happy to receive an invitation
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 your party. And
I’m
 writing to tell you that
I’m
 accepting one. We didn’t see each other for a long time and I miss you. Recently, I have been in Malta on my vacation for four weeks and haven’t seen my friends
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 than a month. I spoke only English and I really miss
Russian
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 language. I want to meet my dear friends and tell
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 everything. So,
I’m
 looking forward to your dinner party. I learned to cook an absolutely delicious cheesecake with a strawberry and a blueberry. I would like to cook and bring it to the dinner party.
I’m
 sure everybody will like my meal. By the way, I bought a new amazing red dress and it will be a great moment to put on one. I just wanted to ask. What will be
dress
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 code? See you soon. Yours lovingly, Nadya
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coherence cohesion
Consider polishing the logical flow of your letter to make it more seamless. For instance, you can better connect the explanation of why you are accepting the invitation with your recent experiences.
task achievement
Include more details if you wish to achieve a higher band. For example, adding specific anecdotes or describing what you missed about speaking Russian could enhance the completeness of your response.
suitable writing tone
You have used an appropriate tone throughout the letter, which makes it friendly and engaging.
single idea per paragraph
Your letter contains distinct paragraphs, each addressing a different point, which adds to the overall clarity.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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