The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given 2 graphs
provides
information about the outcome of Change the verb form
provide
Correct article usage
the questionnarie
questionnarie
, which is as to kids' spare time activities. Correct your spelling
questionnaire
questionnaires
While
the first one related
to male kids, the second graph tells the activities Add a missing verb
is related
that
is
attended by female children.
Change the verb form
are
Overall
, whereas
computer games are the most desirable activity
by boys, girls mostly choose to dance.
According to
just over 1 in 3 of
boys, which is the Change preposition
apply
largerst
proportion, playing video games is the best leisure Correct your spelling
largest
activity
. This
ratio is followed by basketball lovers by slightly more than a quarter. With the exception of computer games and basketball, there is no activity
that is
chosen by more than 20% of male activists. When it comes to the least chosen activity
, it is reading by insignificant
percentage.
Among the girl survey attendees dancing is the most popular leisure hobby by just above 25%. Reading is Correct article usage
an insignificant
at
2nd place by more than 1 in 5 Change preposition
in
of
girls Change preposition
apply
unlike
boys. Add the comma(s)
, unlike
Finally
, gymnastic
is the least chosen Fix the agreement mistake
gymnastics
activity
by around 10%.Submitted by TUTOO on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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