The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given 2 graphs
provides
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information about the outcome of
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the questionnarie
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questionnarie
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questionnaire
questionnaires
, which is as to kids' spare time activities.
While
the first one
related
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to male kids, the second graph tells the activities
that
is
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attended by female children.
Overall
,
whereas
computer games are the most desirable
activity
by boys, girls mostly choose to dance.
According to
just over 1 in 3
of
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boys, which is the
largerst
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largest
proportion, playing video games is the best leisure
activity
.
This
ratio is followed by basketball lovers by slightly more than a quarter. With the exception of computer games and basketball, there is no
activity
that is
chosen by more than 20% of male activists. When it comes to the least chosen
activity
, it is reading by
insignificant
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percentage. Among the girl survey attendees dancing is the most popular leisure hobby by just above 25%. Reading is
at
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in
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2nd place by more than 1 in 5
of
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girls
unlike
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boys.
Finally
,
gymnastic
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gymnastics
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is the least chosen
activity
by around 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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