A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Vivian!
How are you doing? I believe that you are doing great. I'm writing
this
letter to say
about Verb problem
talk
my
Change the word
the
camp
which is
I went Unnecessary verb
apply
last
time.
Change preposition
to last
Last
time in August, I went to my lovely camp
with my sister. This
camp
was located in Yakkabog, and it was called with
Nihol. In Change preposition
apply
this
camp
we can eat our Add a comma
camp,
favorite
foods 5 times Change the spelling
favourite
in
a day and we can go to see the big river behind our Change preposition
apply
camp
. In the camp
we Add a comma
camp,
celebrated
a lot of parties and played Verb problem
had
different
competitions. In the sports Change preposition
in different
competition
our group was the winner. Add a comma
competition,
While
day we listened to our lovely music and this
made we
happy.
You know our Correct pronoun usage
us
camp
was located between two big mountains so in the camp
we saw some snakes. This
is dangerous for little children. At night the air was very cold so some girls were and they had Add an article
a hight
the hight
hight
Correct your spelling
high
temperature
and cold.
I can tell you that when you come to Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
this
camp
with me we will spend our time very funny and enjoyable. After camp
we had some memories. In our Add a comma
camp,
camp
we Add a comma
camp,
never
bored. If you want to come with me you can connect with me on the phone. I am waiting for your answer.
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task achievement
Ensure that the letter addresses all parts of the prompt clearly and directly. Spend some more time describing possible disadvantages and explaining why your friend would enjoy the camping trip.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow between ideas. For instance, connect the paragraphs more smoothly and aim for a more organized presentation of ideas.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for the context, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You have included a clear greeting and closing, which helps in making the letter sound personal and polite.
coherence cohesion
Paragraphs are well-structured with single ideas, making it easier to follow the content.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,