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An English-speakeng friend of yours has written to you to ask how your studies are going. Write an email to this friend. In your email, • tell you friend how you are preparing for the exam • tell him how you feel about it • tell him your expectations

#english-speakeng #friend #studies #email #exam #expectations
Dear Julian, Hi Julian, how are you? I hope you are doing great. Thank you
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 me and
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 me some details about yourself. I am so
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 to know that you are doing well with your studies and
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. As for your question regarding how I am doing with my studies, it is not exactly going too well, because I worry about my studies. These days I am learning more than usual studying
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 because I am preparing for my 7th-semester final exam. I am studying hard to achieve my goals. I am ready for my all subjects except "Business Finance" and "Management
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 my teacher and I
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 him about these. I need to study more to secure good grades. I feel a bit nervous
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 because I am not exactly sure that I understand him. I am a little bit nervous
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 because if I do not do well in these subjects
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 semester, my
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 grade is probably going to be affected more negatively than I thought. But I hope I study hard, I do well and I secure good grades. Please wish me luck. Warm regards, Lola
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task achievement
Your email covers all the points asked in the task, and the content is relevant and appropriate. However, try to further enhance clarity and avoid repetitiveness. For example, mentioning twice that you feel nervous could be combined into a single stronger statement.
coherence cohesion
You use paragraphing effectively, which helps in organizing your thoughts well. To improve coherence, try using more cohesive devices such as linking phrases (e.g., 'in addition', 'furthermore'). This can make your writing flow even more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are strong, providing a warm and personal touch to the email. This makes your writing engaging and friendly.
task achievement
You have provided relevant and specific examples of how you are preparing for your exams, such as mentioning specific subjects and talking to your teacher. This adds depth to your email.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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