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Compare between the educational system of Australia and Palestine

#system #australia #palestine
In today's world, providing
the a
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 great educational system is a privilege for every country and
both
Palestine
 and
Australia
 are working to improve their educational system. Despite the similarities between
both
 systems
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the differences are
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 noticeable in fees,
pathway
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 and language. In
this
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 I will discuss each point for
both
countries
.
Firstly
, When it comes to public
school
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schools
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both
Palestine
 and
Australia
are providing
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 free education for
the
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students
. As they care more about having a
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 citizen,
both
countries
 are giving their nation the facility of studying the
school
 stage for free.
In contrast
 to
school
, in
univeristies
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universities
students
 have to pay if they want to study either in
Palestine
 or in
Ausrtalia
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Australia
, but there is a gap between the two
countries
 in the university fees, as in
Palestine
 you will pay much less than in
Australia
.
For example
, studying dentistry in
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Australia
 will cost
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 domestic student 37
thousnad
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thousand
 U.S dollars
while
 in
Palestine
 studying dentistry will cost the student 20
tousand
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thousand
 U.S dollars.
Secondly
,the big
distrebution
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distribution
 of schools inside the country makes a
parellel
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parallel
 between
Australia
 and
Palestine
.On the one hand,
both
Australia
 and
Palestine
 are trying to make
eduction
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education
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accessable
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accessible
for
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 the
resident
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residents
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, and for
that
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 they are making
school
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schools
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 nearly in every
suberb
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suburb
 of the country.
On the other hand
, reaching
school
 for the
students
 of
Palestine
 is not as easy as
student
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 of
Australia
.
Due to
 the
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multiple
obsacles
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obstacles
 that the Palestinian face
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like security checks or wars, sometimes it's hard for the
students
 to go to their
school
.
Thirdly
,
English
 is one of the shared subjects that
both
countries
 have
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in their
curiculum
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curriculum
. People
in
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these days are using
English
 for trading and work, so it
important
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 for
both
Palestine
 and
Australia
 to teach their
students
 how to use it
proparly
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properly
. Unlike
Australia
,
Palestine
 does not use
English
 for other subjects like math, science and Physics which makes it harder for the
students
 when they start studying at the university to adapt
with
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 the idea of having their
slids
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slides
 written in
English
, and in
fact
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fact,
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this
 may affect their GPA. In conclusion,
both
 Palestinian and Australian educational systems have their advantages and drawbacks.
While
Palestine
 is good when it comes to the cost of university,
Australia
 is better in
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accessability
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access
 to schools and using
English
 for all the subjects. The process of developing the educational system will never stop and
both
countries
gradute
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graduate
 great
students
.
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grammar
Try to proofread your essay to correct minor spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'univeristies' should be 'universities').
task achievement
Make sure to expand on ideas and provide clear, detailed explanations to demonstrate your understanding and to provide a more comprehensive response.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and evidence to support your main points, especially when discussing pathways and accessibility.
task achievement
You have clearly presented the differences and similarities between the educational systems of Australia and Palestine.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is logically structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a distinct point of comparison, which helps maintain coherence.

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