IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Look at the graph showing worldwide rice consumption.

#rice #consumption
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph illustrates the expectations for rice consumption in the world from 1990 until 2040.
Overall
Linking Words
, the only
projection
Use synonyms
 that decreases gradually is the fourth one. Meanwhile, the other three projects seem to grow rapidly starting from 2010 to 2040, with the
first
Use synonyms
projection
Use synonyms
 on top. During the
first
Use synonyms
 two centuries, it noticed that Project 4 was increasing with more than 300 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 of rice; after that, in 2000, it reached about 360, but in 2010, it reached its highest amount, which is approximately 420 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
. In that year, it seems that three other trends started to grow and have a possible increase. In the interval from 2010 to 2040, the
first
Use synonyms
projection
Use synonyms
 tends to be taking the lead as it reached just under 500 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 2020, and it is expected that it will increase again to approximately 520 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
. The highest the
first
Use synonyms
 project gets will be in 2040 for almost 530 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
.
In addition
Linking Words
, the second and third trends seem to be in competition as they have a similar estimate. We can say that they started to have different expectations of rice amounts between 2030 and 2040. Still,
projection
Use synonyms
 2 manages to reach exactly 500 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 2040,
whereas
Linking Words
 the third
projection
Use synonyms
 is expected to be approximately 470 metric
tonnes
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by 9500kawther1700 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion to better frame the discussion.
task achievement
Make sure to clarify the relative ranking of the projections consistently throughout the essay.
task achievement
Include more specific data points and describe trends more precisely.
task achievement
The overall trends and key points in the data are identified and discussed.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay is logical, and the main points are generally well presented.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: