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You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference. Write a letter to a former teacher. In your letter: give details of the job explain why it is important to you suggest what information your teacher could put in the reference

#job #reference #teacher #information
Dear Sir, I hope
this
letter
 finds you in radiant spirits and best of health. I am writing
this
letter
 to
request
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if
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that
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 you
can
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apply
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give
a
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me a
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letter
 of reference, which is required by me to apply for the post of
a
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apply
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junior analyst at Apex Technologies. As you are aware of the fact,
while
 hiring freshers, companies want to know about
candidate's
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strength
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 and weaknesses and they consider references
is
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as
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 the best way for it.
Therefore
, they ask for two letters of reference
along with
 the job application.
Hence
, being a computer subject teacher of mine in college, you know my personality in and out.
Thus
,
this
 reference
letter
 from you could help me to crack
this
 job. About the content of
letter
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 of recommendation,
firstly
, you
colud
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could
 mention my conduct at the college.
Secondly
, my ability to cope
in
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stress
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 situations.
Lastly
, my quality of handling many tasks at a time. I hope you
would
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will
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 give
a
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apply
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wise consideration to my request. I am looking forward
for
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 hearing a positive response from your side. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
Submitted by mrsdns on

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coherence cohesion
The overall letter is well-structured, but it can be improved by organizing the paragraphs by main points. For instance, separate different aspects of your qualities into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about the job and why it is important to you. This can better highlight the significance of the reference letter for your application.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful, which is suitable for a formal reference request.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of the letter are well done, maintaining a polite and professional manner.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reference letter
  • former teacher
  • job application
  • recommendation
  • career goals
  • professional development
  • academic performance
  • responsibilities
  • company
  • skills
  • qualifications
  • gratitude
  • support
  • aspirations
  • context
  • interaction
  • additional information
  • correspondence
  • tailor the reference
  • specific qualities
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