The diagrams below show the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The flow chart illustrates the glucose production from
saccharum
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Saccharum
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officinarum.
Overall
, there are seven stages from growing until dying and cooling the substances.
Firstly
, the cultivation stage where the farmers need to plant and grow the
sugar
cane
approximately
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12 to 18 months. After
completed
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the latter step, there are two ways
in harvesting
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to harvest
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crops
such
as manually by cutting or
machanically
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mechanically
mechanical
using machines. Once harvested, the
sugar
cane is transported to factories for
crushing
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a crushing
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process where it is crushed to extract the juice.
Next,
the juice will be purified by removing any dirt and impurities. When the purifying stage is complete, it
ready
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for crystallization to form a syrup.
Following
this
, the
sugar
crystals from the syrup will be
seperated
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separated
using centrifuges.
Lastly
, the
sugar
will proceed
for
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with
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drying
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the drying
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and cooling process before packaging and distribution.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultivation
  • harvesting
  • mechanically
  • juice extraction
  • purifying
  • impurities
  • evaporation
  • concentration
  • crystallization
  • centrifuges
  • distribution
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