The diagrams below show the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The flow chart illustrates the glucose production from
saccharum
officinarum. Change the capitalization
Saccharum
Overall
, there are seven stages from growing until dying and cooling the substances.
Firstly
, the cultivation stage where the farmers need to plant and grow the sugar
cane approximately
12 to 18 months. After Change preposition
for approximately
completed
the latter step, there are two ways Change the form of the verb
completing
in harvesting
crops Change preposition
to harvest
such
as manually by cutting or machanically
using machines. Once harvested, the Correct your spelling
mechanically
mechanical
sugar
cane is transported to factories for crushing
process where it is crushed to extract the juice.
Add an article
a crushing
the crushing
Next,
the juice will be purified by removing any dirt and impurities. When the purifying stage is complete, it ready
for crystallization to form a syrup. Add a missing verb
is ready
Following
this
, the sugar
crystals from the syrup will be seperated
using centrifuges. Correct your spelling
separated
Lastly
, the sugar
will proceed for
Change preposition
with
drying
and cooling process before packaging and distribution.Correct article usage
the drying
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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