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How does the film Green Book illustrate the effects of racial segregation on personal relationships?

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Green Book takes us back to the early 1960s. The plot begins with a New Yorker, Tony Lip, who finds himself unemployed
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 the nightclub where he works
in
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is temporarily closed for renovations. To find
a
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work to support his family, he is hired by
Dr
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. Don
Shirley
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, a renowned Jamaican-American pianist, to be his driver and bodyguard during an eight-week
touring
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 to the Deep South. The story sets
background
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 when racial segregation was highly forced, making the trips dangerous for a black man, especially
Dr
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. Don
Shirley
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. The film is packed with references to the non-integrated situation of the period. In between scenes of old times, we see a talented
colored
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 musician
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 with his self-identity. During the touring journey, they pass several cotton plantations, where black
labors
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 are doing back-breaking work and toiling under
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harsh
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;
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,
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.
Shirley
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 sits comfortably in the car watching himself being separated from both white men and black men.
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, compared to their
behavior
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 and
educate
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 level, the white driver is lower educated and acts uncivilized,
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 the black musician has received
elite
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 education and
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a
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great etiquette. There is an interesting scene
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that
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 Tony eagerly devours fried chicken with his hand in the car,
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.
Shirley
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 insists on using tableware.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • racial segregation
  • prejudice
  • discrimination
  • personal relationships
  • bond
  • journey
  • societal expectations
  • distrust
  • overcome
  • growth
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