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The diagram below shows the proposed changes to an office building. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the proposed changes to an office building. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the current and future planned blueprints of
office
Add an article
an office
the office
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 building.
Overall
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, the
work place
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workplace
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 will be transformed into a modern and more entertainment
areas
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area
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 for the staff. Looking at the two unused landscapes,
at
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on
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 the left side of the map, it will soon become an outdoor activity area for the worker to take a fresh air.
On the
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The
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 right side will turned into a meeting space
at the end
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 of the corner
while
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 the
upfront
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front
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 will be
putting
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apply
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a coffee machine to drink. Regarding the entrance and reception, it will be placed at a new location between the offices. As we can see, the kitchen and canteen will be replaced owing to expand the size of the office
whereas
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 the stock room will
be remained
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remain
have remained
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 the same.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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