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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1975 to 2025.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1975 to 2025.
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The bar graph shows the changes in the
rates
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 of
birth
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 and
death
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 in Switzerland between 1975 and 2025.
Overall
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, the
birth
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rates
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will
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are
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expected to increase,
however
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, the amount of
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death
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deaths
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 will show reverse
result
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results
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 following years.
Moreover
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, there was a significant rise in the number of
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birth
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births
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.
Initially
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, the point of
birth
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 and
death
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 were just above
at
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apply
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1 and just under
at
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1 million. After a decade,
thiese
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these
 tendancies changed
the
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their
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 role with themselves.
Following
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In following
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 years, in 1995,
birth
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rates
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 rose to 1,5
millons
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million
,
besides
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 that, the number of
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death
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deaths
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 reached
to
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apply
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around 1.3 mln. In 2015, the quantity of
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birth
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births
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 doubled and it was predicted to grow next years.
In contrast
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, the number of
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death
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deaths
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 consisted of
one third
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one-third
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 of
birth
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rates
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 in 2015. Afterwards, by 2025 there was a slight decline in the
rates
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 of
death
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, birth, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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