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the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided maps illustrate the alternation in the accessibility of a city hospital in
years
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the years
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 from 2007 to 2010.
Overally
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Overall
, there were significant changes in the access
road
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 to the city hospital in 2010.
Firstly
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, two roundabouts were constructed at the beginning and the end of the Hospital
Road
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 in order to ease the accessibility to the clinic and its facilities.
Secondly
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, in 2007, there was a car park for both staff and visitors, but
then
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, it was decided to build two
seperated
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separated
separate
 car parks specialized for personnel and
public
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the public
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. The public car park was situated on the east of the Ring
Road
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,
whereas
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 the parking lot for personnel was located next to the Hospital
Road
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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,
transportation
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the transportation
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 system
altered
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was altered
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 in 2010.
For example
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, in 2009,
the
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apply
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Hospital
Road
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 was
facilitized
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facilitated
 by six bus stops. After
the
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apply
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consideration, they were transferred to the west of the Hospital
road
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 and a bus station was constructed in 2010.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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