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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The two tables contain
sales
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 data for Fair-trade coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004, in
five
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 nations of Europe. The first table shows the low-level coffee
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 increasing in all
five
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 countries, albeit to widely varying degrees. In
two
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the two
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 places
sales
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 increased by the same small amount: 1.8 –2
million
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euros
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 in Denmark, and 0.8—1
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 in Sweden. The increment was slightly larger in Belgium, from 1—1.7
million
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euros
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. Meanwhile, in
Switzerland
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Switzerland,
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sales
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 doubled from 3—6
million
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euros
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.
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, in the UK there was an enormous increase, from 1.5—20
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euros
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. In the second table, it is Switzerland which stands out as buying far more fair-trade bananas than the other four countries. Swiss
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 figures jumped from 15—47
million
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euros
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 across these
five
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 years,
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 in the UK and Belgium
sales
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 only grew from 1—5.5 and from 0.6—4
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euros
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 respectively. Sweden and Denmark showed a different pattern, with falls in
bananas
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banana
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sales
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 from 1.8—1 and 2—0.9
million
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euros
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. Comparing the two tables,
it is clear that
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 in 1999 Fair-trade coffee
sales
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 ranged from 0.8—3
million
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euros
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 in these
five
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 countries,
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 banana
sales
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also
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 mostly clustered between 0.6 and 2
million
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euros
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, with Switzerland the outlier at a huge 15
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euros
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. By 2004,
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 figures for both products had risen across the board, except for Sweden and Denmark which recorded drops in banana
sales
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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