The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. •Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the different mobile phone
features
in 3 years
. It is clear that
first
3 Correct article usage
the first
features
are most
used in all Correct article usage
the most
years
that
shown in Correct word choice
as
table
.
The feature of making calls is Add an article
the table
most
used in 3 Correct article usage
the most
years
,
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apply
while
playing music is the least used in this
years
.
Also
sending and receiving text messages are in second place of
getting used, Change preposition
apply
besides
people are prefer
to take photos rather than Change the verb form
prefer
playing
games.
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play
table
, people are making calls more than using other Add an article
the table
features
and in
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apply
this
years
the Fix the agreement mistake
year
percentage
are
almost 100%. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Otherwise
, people are texting with other
more than taking photos and Fix the agreement mistake
others
thats
why the Correct your spelling
that's
percentage
in 3 years
are 73%, 75% and 79%, meanwhile
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meanwhile,
percentage
of taking photos are
66%, 71% and 76%.
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is
Furthermore
, there is
4 Correct subject-verb agreement
are
last
feature
that Fix the agreement mistake
features
was
used less than others and the feature of searching Correct subject-verb agreement
were
in
the internet are most used Change preposition
on
in
Change preposition
of
this
4 Correct determiner usage
these
features
and had considerable growth that in
first did not Change preposition
apply
had
any data, Change the verb form
have
then
41% and 73%. Then
goes playing video games which percentage
was 17%, 42% and 41%. Moreover
, there goes
least two Verb problem
are at
features
that
is
playing music and recording video and their Change the verb form
are
percentage
is 12%, 18% and 26% and no percentage
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words features, years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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