The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.
The presented line
graph
gives data on attendance to and from
Britian
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Britain
in
years
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the years
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of
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apply
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1979 and 1999,
also
the
given
Verb problem
apply
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bar
graph
illustrates the most popular
countries
that
UK
tourists
had
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apply
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visited.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in the line
graph
attendance overseas by
UK
residents
was
noticably
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noticeably
more than visits to
UK
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the UK
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by abroad
tourists
.
Also
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Also,
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it is clear that
on the bar
graph
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graph,
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UK
tourists
are more
Verb problem
have
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visited France and Spain than other
countries
. In accordance with
line
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the line
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graph
in 1979 the count of
people
that visited in and out of
UK
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the UK
show examples
are
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is
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almost equal
10
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to 10
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million
people
.
Moreover
in 1989 count of
UK
residents
traveling
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travelling
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abroad had significant growth to 32
million
people
,
while
number
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a number
the number
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of
tourist
Change to a plural noun
tourists
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visited
Wrong verb form
visiting
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UK
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the UK
show examples
was almost 20
million
.
Then
in 1999 amount of
UK
residents
traveling
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travelling
show examples
overseas rapidly increased to almost 52
million
,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
show examples
visitros
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visitors
to the
UK
was
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were
show examples
approximately 28
million
.
Furthermore
, in agreement with
bar
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the bar
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graph
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graph,
show examples
the most popular
countries
Fix the agreement mistake
country
show examples
visited by
UK
residents
is France about 11
million
visitors.
Also
,
people
prefer to
went
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go
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to Spain rather than
USA
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the USA
show examples
and because of
that
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that,
show examples
the number of
UK
tourists
was 9
million
,
while
number
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a number
the number
show examples
of
UK
tourists
in
USA
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the USA
show examples
is about 4
million
.
Besides
, there is
last
two
countries
that
visiteed
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visited
by them is Greece and Turkey and
count
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the count
show examples
is almost equal
2
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between 2
show examples
and 3
million
of
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apply
show examples
UK
residents
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, it is clear that, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, countries, uk, tourists, residents, people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • consistent increase
  • sharp rise
  • gradual growth
  • outbound travel
  • inbound tourism
  • popular destination
  • significantly outstripped
  • gap widened
  • given period
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