The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.
The presented line
graph
gives data on attendance to and from Britian
in Correct your spelling
Britain
years
Correct article usage
the years
of
1979 and 1999, Change preposition
apply
also
the given
bar Verb problem
apply
graph
illustrates the most popular countries
that UK
tourists
had
visited.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, it is clear that
in the line graph
attendance overseas by UK
residents
was noticably
more than visits to Correct your spelling
noticeably
UK
by abroad Correct article usage
the UK
tourists
. Also
Add a comma
Also,
it is clear that
on the bar graph
Add a comma
graph,
UK
tourists
are more
visited France and Spain than other Verb problem
have
countries
.
In accordance with line
Correct article usage
the line
graph
in 1979 the count of people
that visited in and out of UK
Correct article usage
the UK
are
almost equal Correct subject-verb agreement
is
10
Change preposition
to 10
million
people
. Moreover
in 1989 count of UK
residents
traveling
abroad had significant growth to 32 Change the spelling
travelling
million
people
, while
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
tourist
Change to a plural noun
tourists
visited
Wrong verb form
visiting
UK
was almost 20 Correct article usage
the UK
million
. Then
in 1999 amount of UK
residents
traveling
overseas rapidly increased to almost 52 Change the spelling
travelling
million
, meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
visitros
to the Correct your spelling
visitors
UK
was
approximately 28 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
million
.
Furthermore
, in agreement with bar
Correct article usage
the bar
graph
the most popular Add a comma
graph,
countries
visited by Fix the agreement mistake
country
UK
residents
is France about 11 million
visitors. Also
, people
prefer to went
to Spain rather than Change the verb
go
USA
and because of Correct article usage
the USA
that
the number of Add a comma
that,
UK
tourists
was 9 million
, while
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
UK
tourists
in USA
is about 4 Correct article usage
the USA
million
.
Besides
, there is last
two countries
that visiteed
by them is Greece and Turkey and Correct your spelling
visited
count
is almost equalAdd an article
the count
2
and 3 Change preposition
between 2
million
of
Change preposition
apply
UK
residents
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, it is clear that, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, countries, uk, tourists, residents, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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