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Your next door neighbour likes to listen to music late at night. Because of the loud music, you often lose sleep. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter •describe this situation •explain the problems it is causing you •offer at least one solution

#door #neighbour #music #night #manager #•describe #situation #•explain #•offer
Dear Sir or
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madam
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, I am one of your loyal visitors who often came
in
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 your hotel.
Resently
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Recently
, I rented
an
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accommodation
which
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in the
center
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 of
city
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. Actually, the apartment is well equipped,
however
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however,
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this
 time I am writing to complain about
noise
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the noise
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 which
it
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is made by my next-door
neighbour
. I am a businessman and I move to different places for my job. Currently, I work at the office which
located
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 in the
center
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 of
city
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the city
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. So I rent the apartment until 30th October.
This
 is because I will go to another country a month later and now I am
making
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 projects for my business. I work more at the office and I am coming to tired to my home. Actually, I lose sleep not least because my
neighbour
 listens to music which is loud at night. At the
moments
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 I am working all day and I feel exhausted when I come
to
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home. Even
so
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 my next
neighbour
 likes to
listen
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listen to
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 loud music late at night and he
listens
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listens to
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 music until morning. So I can't sleep at night and can't work at
office
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 for
this
. I would like to ask you to find a solution to
this
 problem.
For instance
, you refuse my money and I find another apartment or move my
neighbour
 to another room. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Lily.
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
Try to use more formal language to better suit the tone of a complaint letter.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate and polite.
task achievement
You have provided a complete response by describing the situation, explaining the problems, and offering solutions.
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