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Educators should teach facts only after their students have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

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In today's rapidly evolving world, there are eclectic ways people can learn. For some, rote memorization is preferable, and others argue that a deeper understanding of the subject matter is more crucial. The adoption of the recommendation that teachers should teach
facts
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 only after
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 have studied
ideas
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,
trends
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, and
concepts
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 that
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 imply is not sound in the majority of
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. Granted, some
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 require
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 to be taught
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 only after they have studied the
ideas
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,
trends
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, and
concepts
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 that help elucidate those
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.
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' grades are determined not only through their academic accomplishments but
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 through their team projects, discussions, and research performance. An excellent acumen for research projects will not be only derived from their fact-based knowledge. Related experiences and
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 correlated to
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 will help them to excel in their work.
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, the simple understanding of
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 is the foundation of education, so it must be applied to
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 when
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 are studying math
concepts
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. To be specific, rote memorization of mathematical
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,
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 as addition, subtraction, multiplication and division is
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 factor when they start to learn math subject.
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, if they do not thoroughly undergo
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 basic process of learning, they will be challenged to advanced levels of the subject, including linear algebra and calculus. Since it is difficult to deny that we must learn and accept some symbols and notions which are the most basic tools when we study mathematics, there is no other way to circumvent
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 essential process.
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, more
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 like history subjects support the notion that educators should focus on teaching
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 before they teach
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,
trends
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, and
concepts
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 that help explain those
facts
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. To be specific, history subjects have to be delivered objectively to
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. History teachers should not include their private opinions about the World War or they should not concoct any erroneous
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 to their pupils. To illustrate, South Korea's Independence Day is August 15th
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1945, and
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 must be perfectly delivered to learners. To recapitulate, it is partially essential for teachers to teach
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 only after their pupils have studied
ideas
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 and
trends
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 that help explain those
facts
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.
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,
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 are replete with cases demonstrating the importance of factual learning. Adapting to the new phases resulting from changes
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 as an education shift plays a pivotal role in the prosperity of nations and organizations.
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task achievement
Your essay does a good job of addressing the task prompt, but there is room for a more complete and in-depth response. Consider elaborating on the advantages and disadvantages of the recommendation more comprehensively.
coherence cohesion
The ideas presented in your essay are generally clear and logically structured. Nonetheless, try to ensure that each paragraph clearly connects its main idea to the overall argument of the essay.
coherence cohesion
There are minor grammatical and syntactical errors. Make sure to proofread your essay for small inaccuracies such as articles ('a' and 'the') and prepositions.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for the argument, and your conclusion provides a solid wrap-up of the main points discussed.
supported main points
The essay uses specific examples to support the points being made, particularly in the sections discussing math and history education.
logical structure
The overall logical structure of the essay is coherent, and the main points are generally well-supported. You provide a balanced argument with both sides considered.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conceptual understanding
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • framework
  • assimilate
  • underlying principles
  • disciplines
  • educational foundation
  • interconnectedness
  • pedagogy
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