Some people think that it is better to choose friends who always have same opinions as them, other people believe it’s good to have friend who disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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apply
type
of friendships, Change to a plural noun
types
friends
who ahways
confirm each other, and critical Correct your spelling
always
friends
. similarl
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similarly
similar
this
essay will examine the differences between this
two views.
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these
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with Correct your spelling
agree
relationship
which there is Add an article
the relationship
a relationship
critical
point of view. Add an article
a critical
the critical
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whit
, applying criticism is the most important subject. Correct your spelling
with
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another
matter which can not be disregarded as well because always discussion can lead to progress and Add a missing verb
is another
growing
for Replace the word
growth
human
. Fix the agreement mistake
humans
For
example
an international newspaper Add a comma
example,
publish
news that 71% of friendships that had been involved in discussion have been able Wrong verb form
published
improve
in the way of life. Add the particle
to improve
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, I assume that every argument between friends
is improving
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improves
link
in their hearts Fix the agreement mistake
links
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, the
people are changing, not only their communication methodsCorrect article usage
apply
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apply
also
their perception in
connections.
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of
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However
same
opinion in relationships may Change the article
the same
brings
a few plus points. Wrong verb form
bring
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example
the researchers Add a comma
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are indicating
that being approved by Wrong verb form
indicated
friends
,causes lot
of Change the article
a lot
self confidence
. Add a hyphen
self-confidence
Hence
, having the
common taste, not only Correct article usage
a
make
a lasting friendship, but Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
also
this
kind of communication can be mor
strong and causes the connections Correct your spelling
more
stood
long lasting Change the verb form
to stand
Never the less
, I realize that the connections Correct your spelling
Nevertheless
is
switching current, because humans Change the verb form
are
new
insight about healthy Add a missing verb
have new
relation
with their relatives.
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relations
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, undoubtedly reasonable critical and opposite conversation
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logical progress in their life.Correct subject-verb agreement
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task achievement
You have outlined both views and given your opinion, which ensures that the task is addressed. However, further elaboration is needed on some points to make your response more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
While the essay follows a logical structure, some transitions between ideas and paragraphs could be smoother. Also, some sentences are unclear due to grammatical errors.
coherence cohesion
You have incorporated a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your essay well.
task achievement
You provided an example from an international newspaper, which adds credibility to your argument.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?