Some people think that it is better to choose friends who always have same opinions as them, other people believe it’s good to have friend who disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

At present, numerous individuals consider that
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there are two
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of friendships,
friends
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always
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friends
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similarly
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essay will examine the differences between
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two views.
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agree
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which there is
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point of view.
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, enhancing personality
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another
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matter which can not be disregarded as well because always discussion can lead to progress and
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for
human
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.
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an international newspaper
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news that 71% of friendships that had been involved in discussion have been able
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in the way of life.
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their relational structure and makes strong
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in their hearts
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people are changing, not only their communication methods
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but
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their perception
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connections.
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, it is said that being of
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opinion in relationships may
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a few plus points.
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the researchers
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that being approved by
friends
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of
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.
Hence
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common taste, not only
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a lasting friendship, but
also
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more
strong and causes the connections
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long lasting
Never the less
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, I realize that the connections
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switching current, because humans
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insight about healthy
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relations
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with their relatives.
To conclude
, undoubtedly reasonable critical and opposite
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conversations
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provide plenty of positive things and
brings
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bring
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logical progress in their life.
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task achievement
You have outlined both views and given your opinion, which ensures that the task is addressed. However, further elaboration is needed on some points to make your response more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
While the essay follows a logical structure, some transitions between ideas and paragraphs could be smoother. Also, some sentences are unclear due to grammatical errors.
coherence cohesion
You have incorporated a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your essay well.
task achievement
You provided an example from an international newspaper, which adds credibility to your argument.

Your opinion

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